(Rutgers University)
The biggest influence and inspiration in my life is my family. They’re the people that support you in all of the decisions that you make in your life. They love you no matter what. Out of everyone I know, the most influential person I know is my mom.
She is braver than a thousand soldiers, in my perspective. She has reached more than she would have ever expected 19 years ago when she graduated. All she was before was a newly graduated Filipino nurse, then her life suddenly got complicated. During the beginning of the year 2003, my mom had to go under a kidney surgery for total kidney failure. My uncle was generous enough to donate his healthier kidney, risking his life for his sister’s. My mom’s life became super complicated after that. In 2005 while she was living in Alabama by herself, she had another life changing experience. Her left hip bone weakened because of her kidney medicines, so she underwent in yet another surgery to get that bone replaced by a metal. That’s not the last of her health “issues.”Four years after, her uterus got infected and needed yet another operation. My mom faces more challenges than “average” people. She may struggle through various situations in her life but, she can still face them all.
I was four at the time when my mom’s life started to become more complicated and now I am seventeen and ready to conquer the fear that one day there’s going to be bigger challenges like this for my mom and myself. I have decided to take a course in nursing so that I may help her with her “conditions” and everyone else’s in the world. I believe that Rutgers University will give me the proper education to earn my place as a highly respected nurse.
4 comments:
Great job, Angel. You did very nice job on this post. Some of your sentences did not make sense. There is one thing I do not understand. You said that you are seventeen and your paragraphs listed dates, like four years ago. Do the dates mean in the real world or when you are fourteen? I just wasn't sure about that. All in all, you did a really good job.
Hi. Krutika! Sorry about the confusion the only thing that didn't make sense was when I said 19 years ago because it should be my mom has worked for 24 years (when I'm actually seventeen) . I wrote seventeen because its supposed to be when we go to college. I also never said four years ago what I said was four years after.
That's fine. I just wanted to make sure, but you make sure you change it in your real college essay, the one you are going to hand in.
Nice post, Angel! I'm sorry about how your mom had to have so many surgeries.I agree with Krutika. That part confused me a little bit. So next time, work on improving that. Overall, it was really nice!
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